Sunday, June 6, 2010

A Good Book

The word for Sunday Scribblings No. 218 is "mess". This is my micro-sized story.

He went to his bedroom and made his bed. He made it very neatly, so that the blankets were tight across the mattress. He picked up all of his toys and clothes from the floor. Clean up your mess, he said to himself, over and over, as he worked. He said this in his head, not out loud. He was careful not to make much, but was very quiet as he tidied and sorted.

When the room was perfect, he sat on the floor in the corner and read his book. The book was good. He could imagine himself as one of the people in the book, in another place. When he was reading a good book like that, he couldn't hear the real-world sounds, like his parents yelling at each other.

6 comments:

Understanding Alice said...

you are right, that is very real - and a good double portrayal of mess.

Dee Martin said...

this broke my heart a little. I'm glad he has the book to escape to.

Bernard S. Jansen said...

Thanks both for your kind comments.

oldegg said...

This sounds like a little boy who has been shouted at himself and possibly hit too. He is learning fast let's hope its a lesson that makes him and doesn't break him.

Micro size fiction is good!

Bernard S. Jansen said...

oldegg, you're right on the money. That is the little boy's sad story. I was hoping that might come out a little. As to whether the lesson makes or breaks him, I don't know his future, yet.

oldegg said...

Thanks for the visit. In my "Mess" post 90% was true and only the lead in was fiction to capture the reader. See my daughter's (CF)comment after!