The following scene is inspired by Three Word Wednesday number CCIV. The words are break, negative and surface, and are shown in bold below.
Piet didn't consider himself to be a negative person; a pessimist. He was a realist. He could objectively assess any situation. He looked below the surface of a problem, identifying the root causes, and therefore the cures. Yes, a realist.
But, as Piet thought about his marriage, and what it had become, and his prospects of making it once again what it once had been, there was little he could do except break down and cry; again.
After a few minutes, he could control his breathing better. He wiped his face and blew his nose and dropped the tissue alongside a pile of rubbish on the lounge-room floor. He looked around for his wallet and keys, then left for the bottle-shop. He'd be spending the evening with a bottle of Johnny Walker, again.
Wednesday, September 1, 2010
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6 comments:
Sad! A realistic picture of the breakdown of a marriage.
The sadness comes through in your writing, especially the ending. You handled this subject very, very well.
Once again, good work; I like this exercise, plan to use it with my students this year!
Always a nice slice of life from you. I love how the character is so exact, maybe even meticulous in his approach to situations, and then in the end, he takes a stroll with Johnny. Good contrasting.
This also made me laugh, because I'm always telling my friends and family, I'm not a pessimist, I'm a realist!
Thanks guys, for your kind comments.
This is such a quiet yet emotional piece. I had such conflicting emotions the entire time. I hoped for some sense of hope...and got none. Your way, of laying it down and not offering the fluff is true to real life. I loved it.
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